• niktemadur@lemmy.world
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    I’d love to see this in haiku form, but it doesn’t fit the rhythm

    She checks your phone to see if you’re cheating
    but all she finds
    are star trek memes

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      She checks your phone to see if you’re cheating

      but all she finds

      Is Star Trek memeing

      Not sure if it fits a haiku pattern, but how about that?

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        Haikus are 7-5-7 for syllable patterns. This would be the correct lines:

        She checks your phone to see if

        you’re cheating but all

        she finds is Star Trek memeing

        I went to check because the rhythm felt wrong. Haikus are 5-7-5. We’re two syllables too long. Maybe this would work:

        She checks your phone to

        see if you cheat but all she

        finds are Star Trek memes

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          Now a limerick!
          A young Vulcan once lived in Nantucket
          His logic so sharp he could… I don’t know what to put next.

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            There once was a Vulcan from Nantucket

            With a logic so sharp he could pinch hit

            In an old human game

            Which he loses, so lame

            and the rhyme for Nantucket? Amok it.

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              A Vulcan they called Mister Jibbles
              once had a basket of tribbles
              they bred all night long, multiplied by the dawn
              and caused lots of trouble mayhem and giggles!

              EDIT: take a wild guess
              EDIT2: the Vulcan with logical giggles!