The idea is wonderful, but I’m not a fan of this modernized poetry that lacks any sort of structure. Free verse, if you will, just feels lacking. Any profound statement on twitter could easily be considered “poetry” by breaking the lines up awkwardly and haphazardly, without any recognizable form and be considereded “poetry” I guess. It feels uninspired and lazy, and I struggle to genuinely enjoy it. But I guess that’s the point of most “modern” art - the point isn’t the organization, the skill, the technique, or the stylization of the art, but merely, what does the art make you “experience” or “feel”. So then why even break up the lines? The pauses feel jarring in some aspect… especially so in the second verse. It could be a single line and not deviate, in any way, from the same flow, idea, or feeling it intends to provoke.
The idea is wonderful, but I’m not a fan of this modernized poetry that lacks any sort of structure. Free verse, if you will, just feels lacking. Any profound statement on twitter could easily be considered “poetry” by breaking the lines up awkwardly and haphazardly, without any recognizable form and be considereded “poetry” I guess. It feels uninspired and lazy, and I struggle to genuinely enjoy it. But I guess that’s the point of most “modern” art - the point isn’t the organization, the skill, the technique, or the stylization of the art, but merely, what does the art make you “experience” or “feel”. So then why even break up the lines? The pauses feel jarring in some aspect… especially so in the second verse. It could be a single line and not deviate, in any way, from the same flow, idea, or feeling it intends to provoke.